Just a random dorky freshman tryna' draw :3
Joined on 5/4/19
For getting back into writing, its incredibly well-written meg :D for a start, it gets across a few concepts that will persist within the continuation of the story (aka, sets up a few things nicely) while bringing just enough information and mystery to intrigue the thoughts of mystery to keep reading ^^
What I would say though is make sure to be subtle with it. sometimes it's best to be less descriptive or use subtle descriptions to bring down word-count and to get the same message across with smaller sentences. Although my number 1 suggestion would be to just keep writing and think about the world your building in its entirety. remember that an environment can really bring out things without describing them (E.G: think about setting, location and their interpreted meaning to the reader) while it will also let ya embody yourself within the setting you are working with.
Still, all of the above are simply suggestions. writing and narrative are always subjective ;P
anywho, this was fantastic to read! I look forward to reading more from ya meg :3